This track is good, but it never peaks. There's a lot of build-up, but it doesn't really build toward a big energy chorus it deserves. You should try adding in more sound when after the build ups. Perhaps a bit of white noise, or try filling the "audio space" a bit more with other types of sound. A lot of potential. I really want to see you keep working.

I really dig your sounds. My only complaint is that you've got a bit of distortion and clipping going on in parts of the track. A lot of potential, though.